There's a very fine line between subtle and heavy-handed, I've discovered. My first draft was criticised for having a weird, unexplained character (Eli), a lack of clarity, and a beginning that was too pat and safe. While my classmates said my story was better, now they say that the story is too obvious, the character of Eli is juvenile, and the magic that the main character Chelsea possesses makes it very unrealistic for her to be in the situation that she is.
I can't please everyone, but I'm glad we had the discussion. It's going to be a serise of experiments and rewrites before "Whiff" is good enough to submit for publication.